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A Solid Teamwork
With Thai ladies
This blog is dedicated for students of Pusdiklat Bahasa Badiklat Dephan RI to enable them communicate with their colleagues and instructor based on on the given tasks, particularly Writing skills.
About Me
- ROISNAHRUDIN
- Pondok Labu, South Jakarta, Indonesia
- Hi all, My name is Ro'is. I am an Army CAPTAIN working in Indonesian Defence Language Center Pondok Labu South Jakarta as the Head of Multimedia (CALL) Center and also a senior English instructor. I got my Master Degree from The University of Melbourne Australia majoring Applied Linguistics - Computer Assisted Language Learning (M.Appling CALL)in 2006. Now, beside teaching I also conducting interpreting tasks for TNI. I would be more than happy if you could share your ideas and join my blog that mostly used for our regular English Language Students for Writing Practices.
OJT 2007
A Solid Teamwork
CORELS-5 Bangkok 07
With Thai ladies
DIBI 01/07
20 comments:
Among other topics, sport is the most interesting one to be discussed by people in many places. For example, when you are at work, the employees tend to talk about sport instead of entertainment or politics. In addition, a group of soldiers, however, prefer sharing opinions about champion league to discussing about tactic to win the war. Furthermore, sport is not only a matter of game but also a pride of a country. Although we have been proud of Roger Federer because he has won a lot of games in tennis court, our country is still left behind by other neighboring countries especially in south east asia region. Yet, we should not easily give up due to the condition that our country is still lack of achievements in sport while the others have started the race to be the best. We, therefore, have an obligation to show to others that we can do what they can do by practicing and improving our capabilities, producing qualified athletes as many as we can, otherwise we will be a looser. In short, in spite of our conditions that have no proud achievement recently, we have to struggle to make an improvement in sport nonetheless there are a lot of limitations we have. One day we will be the best. nur subekhi
My Primary School
I had my first formal education in a private school in Jakarta. The school was small with only ten classes inside, however it was nice and green, therefore, we could learn and play in a conducive situation. The school had two main gates, the entrance door and a small door in the backyard. Every student had to enter the school through the entrance door in the front of the staff room so no one could get into the classroom whenever they came after the bell was ringing. Even though the classroom was small, it was well equipped and furnished. There were one table and a chair for each student and also lockers and computers in addition to support the students with better facilities to encourage our spirit in our studying. In fact it did not mean anything according to the result that we had received. Consequently we had to leave that modern way of studying and we had to receive another system.
Capt. Jansen P.
No Smoking Allowed
As far as I am concerned, smoking generates bad impacts, not only for active smokers but also for passive smokers. That is why I encourage my self to quit smoking a cigarette. Because if you smoke heavily, I would not surprise if you end up with lung cancer . And it is not fair for other people who does not smoke to breathe the smoke that you produce, as if they smoke it themselves.
As a consequence, in order to restrict people who likes to smoke in public areas, I think that government should ban that activities which exasperate other people. In addition, they should establish a certain place which has been installed state-of-the-art technology that will eradicate the smoke by sucking and purifying it into fresh air.
To sum up, having been an active smoker for almost 5 years, I try to halt smoking in order to have gilt-edged stamina to perform my primary task as an Air Force officer. Hence, I will urge all of my colleagues to stop as well.
Created by : 1st Lieutenant Fahrurozi ( A-1)
Problems on climate change has threatened us for years. As we notice, it occurs in every part of the globe in a different forms. At one side, they have the wettest season on the record which cause them another disaster, such as a great flood that they never had in the past. In contrast, the other part of our planet suffer the coolest winter. Another drawback due to the climate change is that the weather or season, for example rain and dry seasons in tropical countries, become unpredictable anymore.
To prevent it become rampant, our government have to make a political actions in number of directions. At individual level, we can use education as the media to build awareness to preserve the environment since at the infant stage. Consequently, it will grow their respect and affection to our planet. While at company level, we can stop them exploit our nature greedily by ruling a strick regulation on natural source exploitation. Furthermore, we can sentence them to stay behind bars if they do not obey it.
1st lt Candra Sukma Adi
Indonesian Army
One thing that all soldiers of The Indonesian Army always remember is what Field Marshall Soedirman had said, that the only thing that would never change is TNI or Indonesian Defense Force, especially the Army. This deeply meaning statement was often to be told in all activities that executed by Army personnel. In fact, from my own point of view, that such of epitaph, which written on tombstones, is not suitable anymore related to what’s happening to our country lately. This is not because I do not lionize Soedirman, yet to me it is just a heart - stopping saying of him. Indonesian Army closes itself from the changes that occurred around it. Starting from the weaponry system to the prosperous of its personnel, so many breath – taking things must be fixed. It underestimates all problems frequently. Even this beloved institution puts them behind often times. Based on that situation, now is the time to make a renewal of our Army. Let’s commence a new Indonesian Army which is stronger with new weapons, pleasantly personnel etc. Therefore, this “Great Indonesia” will be back to its best position in the eyes of other countries and nicest condition in the heart of its citizen
Lt Harry Subarkah A1
The armoured warfare has made war faster and apparently more destructive. In fact, the rules of the first built tank in the World War I are still the same until the modern warfare. Armoured power will be efective if only it is deployed in significant numbers, on the open terrain, with secure and eficient logistical supplies. For example, the huge Soviet Army's armoured units were not able to destroy all the Mujahidin warrior in Afghanistan. It was all because of the field and the condition at the time. Second, it was also applied in Vietnam War, while The superior US's armoured power couldn't diminish the south vietnamese traditional army. Indeed, the armoured power is very important in the modern warfare, but it is not the only and the most important power of an army. Yet, it already did its first intended role, making the static and trench warfare become obsolete. Hezron.
The Use of Global Positioning System
In the past 2 years, the Global Positioning System, also known as GPS, has widely used in daily activities. Formerly, it was designed for used in the military. It maintained and controlled by the United States Department of Defense. All of the Army, the Navy, and the Air Force use it when they conduct a mission either in battlefield or training. In spite of the high technology used in GPS, it is free to use by everyone, everywhere, and anytime around the world. Although it was used by the military, the GPS has also been used in other substance. For example, mobile and aircraft navigation, mining activities, hiking, and others. Furthermore, it is installed in sophisticated hand-held device for daily activity. Therefore, many people are capable of use it wherever he or she want. Yet, this device is considerably expensive compare to other similar devices without GPS in it. In conclusion, the Global Positioning System is not only used by the military but also by people who could gain its benefit within their daily activities.
By Lt Tommy Aryanto
JAPAN BEATS USA
Unbelievable, for the first time in the history of automobile industries, Japan’s Toyota Motor Corporation overtook the USA’s General Motor’s position as the world’s number one car maker in 2007. It claimed to be the top spot in the first three months of the year, furthermore, it also ended GM’s 76-year domination as the leader in the international car industries. Analysts predicted that these Toyota’s top dog position will last for long.
There are five main reliable reasons for the their success. First of all, Toyota Motor Corporation, well-known automobile company not only for its efficient production methods but also its outstanding marketing. Moreover, their tremendous reliability, affordable price and remarkable world class after-sales service also assist them to retain its comprehend as the automobile industries leader. In addition, their innovative effort in automobile production should brace them to keep things that way. Some people also believe that their success due to its unbeatable image. One thing that clearly stands out is that people acquit them when they have troubles with their products.
As a consequence, they have to keep their quality up, otherwise they will be deprived of their position in automobile industries. Toyota’s executives were virtuous in admitting their accomplishment. They impelled that the objective was to be number one in quality, not sales volume.
Created by : PRATOMO SD / AI
Caffeine, a chemistry material found in coffee and tea, is one of the psychoactive chemical widely consumed all around the world. People believe that by consuming coffee could maintain their alertness and overcome their drawn due to lack of sleep and fatigue. Basically, drinking coffee is harmless as long as coffee that we drink and the amount of caffeine that we consume below 300 mg per day, it is about 3 ordinary cup. In addition, based on some study, it is considered wise to consume caffeine less than 100 mg per day especially for people that not use to drink coffee. Moreover, drinking coffee proven by some experts with their researches, could maintain our alertness and concentration. People whom work demand high concentrate and full alertness definitely helped by this result. However, there are several negative impact of drinking coffee. Like all psychoactive material, caffeine more likely addictive to human body. People that use to drink coffee everyday, their body will always demand more and more amount of caffeine just to keep their alertness on normal condition the same condition with the people who do not drink coffee at all. As a result, drinking coffee is harmless as long as the coffee that we drink not to much and only to keep us on our best alertness.
Louis da Costa
A1
Capt Nur,
A very nice piece of writing.
Now let's see what I can advice:
Among (any) other topics (to discuss, I prefer commenting on sport best, because most people around the globe are keen to talk about it). (do you want to talk about sport or the reasons why you want to talk about sport?) I think you want to explore the second topics; reasons why you prefer to discuss about sport better than other topics of discussion) I think your intention was not celarly stated at the beginning of your writing)
I think you should start with a punchy thesis statement about why sports become an ideal topic to discuss.- The rest is pretty confusion between sports it self and the reasons you like it
Hope it helps.
RN
For example, when you are at work, the employees tend to talk about sport instead of entertainment or politics. In addition, a group of soldiers, however, prefer sharing opinions about champion league to discussing about tactic to win the war. Furthermore, sport is not only a matter of game but also a pride of a country. Although we have been proud of Roger Federer because he has won a lot of games in tennis court, our country is still left behind by other neighboring countries especially in south east asia region. Yet, we should not easily give up due to the condition that our country is still lack of achievements in sport while the others have started the race to be the best. We, therefore, have an obligation to show to others that we can do what they can do by practicing and improving our capabilities, producing qualified athletes as many as we can, otherwise we will be a looser. In short, in spite of our conditions that have no proud achievement recently, we have to struggle to make an improvement in sport nonetheless there are a lot of limitations we have. One day we will be the best.
Capt Jansen,
It is good that you aware of the use of past tense for past activies, however the use of past tense for your writing is improper. For factual issues; the condition of the school should be expressed in present tense. It is recommended to use present tense for essay rather than past form. Past form normaly used for past activities only if you have to.
Another problem is the consistency use of vocabulary such as; gate, door, etc. As you might aware that a gate is not a door vice versa.
You also loose control in the use of complex expression;"In fact it did not mean anything according to the result that we had received". It is not quite clear what is your intention.
Overall, I think you need to read and write more. Your ideas are fluent but you are too hurry up to express it.
RN
LT Fahrun, it seems that you language is well expressed, however you loose your focus on the topic os discussion. Please see my advice:
As far as I am concerned, smoking generates bad impacts, not only for active smokers but also for passive smokers. (you should tell what are the bad impacts and then continue to the next sentence).That is why I encourage my self to quit smoking ( a cigarette – not necessary). Because if you (I) smoke heavily, I would not surprise if you end up with lung cancer . And (improper connective)- “Not only that smoking causes lung cancer and other diseases, it also cause unfairness for non smokers). They … it is not fair for other people who does not smoke to breathe the smoke that you produce, as if they smoke it themselves.
As a consequence, in order to restrict people who likes to smoke in public areas, I think that the government should ban that activities which exasperate other people smoking in those area; therefore many non smokers can be saved from exasperation . In addition, they (?) should establish a certain place which has been installed with state-of-the-art technology to eradicate the smokes by sucking (exhausting) and purifying it into fresh air.
To sum up, having been an active smoker for almost 5 years, I try to halt smoking in order to have gilt-edged stamina to perform my primary task as an Air Force officer. Hence, I will urge all of my colleagues to stop as well.
You want to talk about yourself or about the danger of smoking?
RN
Dear Adi,
Your writing is sufficiently developed with some minor mistakes. there are basic errors; personal pronoun, unnecessary explanation, etc.
Please see my advice,
RN
PROBLEMS ON CLIMATE CHANGE HAS THREATENED US FOR YEARS. AS WE NOTICE, IT OCCURS IN EVERY PART OF THE GLOBE IN A DIFFERENT FORMS. AT ONE SIDE, (ONE REGION) THEY HAVE THE WETTEST SEASON ON THE RECORD, (AND ) CAUSE THEM DISASTER, SUCH AS GREAT FLOOD THAT THEY NEVER HAD IN THE PAST. ON THE OTHER PART OF OUR PLANET SUFFERS FROM THE COOLEST WINTER.
(THE CLIMATE CHANGE IN EVERY COUNTRY IS NOW TO BE MORE UNPREDICTABLE, FOR AN EXAMPLE IN TROPICAL COUNTRIES WHERE THERE ARE ONLY TWO SEASONS; WET AND DRY BECOMES VERY HARD TO BE FORCASTED.) ANOTHER DRAWBACK DUE TO THE CLIMATE CHANGE IS THAT THE WEATHER OR SEASON, FOR EXAMPLE RAIN AND DRY SEASONS IN TROPICAL COUNTRIES, BECOME UNPREDICTABLE ANYMORE.
TO PREVENT IT (FROM) BECOMING RAMPANT, OUR GOVERNMENT HAVE (HAS) TO (ADDRESS THE ISSUES BY TAKING SOME QUICK ACTIONS)MAKE A POLITICAL ACTIONS IN NUMBER OF DIRECTIONS. AT INDIVIDUAL LEVEL, WE CAN USE EDUCATION AS THE MEDIA TO BUILD AWARENESS TO PRESERVE THE ENVIRONMENT (FROM THE VERY BEGINNING OF AGE) AT THE INFANT STAGE. CONSEQUENTLY, (THE RESPECT AND AFFECTION TO THE PLANET WILL GROW STRONGLY IN CHILDRENS’ HEARTS) IT WILL GROW THEIR RESPECT AND AFFECTION TO OUR PLANET. WHILE (AT COMPANY LEVEL), WE (THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD) CAN STOP THEM EXPLOIT (ING) OUR (NATURAL RESOURCES) NATURE GREEDILY BY RULING A STRICK REGULATION ON NATURAL SOURCE EXPLOITATION. FURTHERMORE, WE (THE GOVERNMENT SHOULD ALSO) CAN SENTENCE THEM TO STAY BEHIND BARS IF THEY DO NOT OBEY IT.
Training Evolution
Today's fighter pilots are trained in highly sophisticated aircraft. Furthermore , they have the benefit of first-class instruction and the latest intelligence information about their adversaries. Consequently , they are provided with less time to master all of the necessary skills needed by them. The basic lessons of air combat that was absorbed over a one- or two-year period are now compressed into only a few months thus making these young pilots have a lack of appreciation of the basic of air combat. Young pilot currently faced the difficulties of learning skills of air combat that was gained trough years of experience in only a short period of time , providing them only a glimpse of experience , hence making them vulnerable in a real combat situation. Therefore , a firm foundation of knowledge of air combat on each individual has to be established at the early stage of training.
Flooding In Jakarta
Almost every five years, our beloved capital city always gets flood disaster because Jakarta people didn’t care with their circumstances. For instance, they often threw away many kinds of rubbish such as plastic, used cloth, and some bags on the river without any logical reason. Furthermore, the rivers itself are not depth enough, so it will be quite difficult for the water to flow from the river to the sea. The Jakarta authority, on the other hand, didn’t take any significant actions to solve those problems, where the two biggest rivers are not maintained very well. In fact, the government’s program to construct East Canal to control the flood are not finish yet, consequently a lot of people will suffer doe to the regular flood.
LtCol Wisnu
LT Da costa
Caffeine, a chemistry material found in coffee and tea, is one of the psychoactive chemical widely consumed all around the world. People believe that by consuming coffee ( )could maintain their alertness and overcome their drawn due to lack of sleep and fatigue. Basically, drinking coffee is harmless as long as (coffee that we drink and) the amount of caffeine that we consume below 300 mg per day, it is about 3 ordinary cup. In addition, based on some study ( ), it is considered wise to consume caffeine less than 100 mg per day especially for people (that ) not use (d) to drink coffee. Moreover, (according to some experts) drinking coffee proven (to be useful because coffee) by some experts with their researches, could maintain our alertness and concentration. People whom work demand high concentrate (ion) and full alertness definitely helped by this result. However, there are several negative impact (s) of drinking coffee. Like all psychoactive material, caffeine more likely addictive to human body. People (who is) that use (d) to drink coffee everyday, their body will always demand more and more amount of caffeine just to keep their alertness on normal condition(;) the same condition with the people who do not drink coffee at all. As a result, drinking coffee is harmless as long as the coffee that we drink is not too much and only to keep us on our best alertness.
Western culture is threatening our culture.We can see the fact specially from our fashion .Most of indonesian people prefer to imitate western fashion,which most of its clothes considered not polite in our country, they watch on TV rather than wearing traditional one we have.Indeed,kebaya,for example,tends to be ignored by our women now,specially our juvenile.We can see everywhere woman putting on tank top,short skirt,thight pants and short shirt from which we can see one's belly. In addition,none of those was worn during the 1990's when we were more concern about our traditional culture.Moreover,we used to wear something polite.However,now that we are having so much information about the fashion from many medias,we tend to put ours away.Unfortunately,neither parents nor our government thinks that it is an urgency.In dealing with this situation which our culture is in danger,both parents and government should take further actions.Parents must start introducing our traditional fashion earlier to their children while the government must strive to campaign it in order to catch people's attention.Thus,this problem is so complicated that requires immediate actions not only by government but also indonesian citizens. LUKAS SORMIN.
Offering a new product is quiet challenging for us to do. People are prefer to use the old product rather than to replace it with the new one. Hence, we need to do an extra effort in order to convince them that our newly manufactured product is as good as the preceded one. At the end, hopefully, costumers are willing to purchase the product.
To convince costumers demands us as a saler to acknowledge everything related to the products we sale. We should understand the mechanism of our product and how to use it. Instead of giving an explanation about how it works, it is better to demonstrate them directly on the spot. Thus they will be interested. To sum up, showing the advantage of our product is the effective way to come accross our idea to costumer. ltt candra, A-1
Name : Taufik Andriadi
Rank : Capt.
Class : A Reffresher
HOW TO MAINTAIN OUR SHALAT SHUBUH
We can use this tips to maintain our shalat in the dawn or shubuh, hopefully. first, we can practice to what Rasulullah had been thought; take wudhu before fall asleep and go to bed earlier, after that, try to roll over our body to the right face and then get pray. But beforehand we should not eat too much when got the dinner, then avoid tea and coffee, next, we may helped by setting an alarm. Finally, ask to the others to shalat in shubuh, start from your family. Have a nice try....!
Name : Taufik Andriadi
Rank : Capt.
Class : A Reffresher
HOW TO MAINTAIN OUR SHALAT SHUBUH
We can use this tips to maintain our shalat in the dawn or shubuh, hopefully. first, we can practice to what Rasulullah had been thought; take wudhu before fall asleep and go to bed earlier, after that, try to roll over our body to the right face and then get pray. But beforehand we should not eat too much when got the dinner, then avoid tea and coffee, next, we may helped by setting an alarm. Finally, ask to the others to shalat in shubuh, start from your family. Have a nice try....!
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